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I remember you
just as I remember the rain.
But the rain must come
if you want a rainbow

Just as i remember the rain
I remember your face.
If you want a rainbow
just smile.

I remember your face,
it stays in my mind.
Just smile,
the light overpowers the dark.

It stays in my mind
like a song.
The light overpowers the dark
so shed your sadness.

Like a song
I hear your voice,
it's shed it's sadness
it is beautiful that way.

I hear your voice
as though from a distance,
it is beautiful that way,
echoing through my mind.

As though from a distance
I hear the rain,
your voice echoing through my mind,
and I remember you.
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Whoa. I read this and... whoa. Words cannot explain how much I enjoyed it, great job! I love how you took a topic that most everyone can relate to. Somehow, I feel as though the last comma should be the word "and," but at the same time, I lack grammer. Today was one of those days where fate is unkind to me and when I read this about 28 seconds ago... I almost cried. You touched my heart, and I can almost be positive that everyone has lost at least one person in their life, which adds to the touchingness. Great work!
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Aragirl Featured By Owner Jul 20, 2012  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
This is awesome, especially because it seems a lot like something that is happening to me right now.
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